Our Year 6 Blog: Writing

Term 4

Rubric for Information Report

At least 5 paragraphs

Each paragraph (not including Intro and Conclusion) is about a different topic to do with EFC

Relevant and detailed information is included (for example statistics and accurate information)

It does not feature your opinion but instead you cite (according to) where you got your information from

No plagiarizing - the information is in your own words

Correct grammar, punctuation and spelling

Presentation (neat, tidy, well set out, subheading if you choose it)

Effort (based on you)

Vocabulary or technical language used

Homework for Mr Lima's Group

Design a logo for your company. You will need to save your design on a Google Doc (perhaps send it to yourself via email). You will need to write down the answers to the following in reference to your logo (in your English book).

a) Why your logo looks the way it does.

b) What does your logo mean?

c) Why have you chosen the colours?

d) How does it represent an environmentally friendly car company?

due in on Wednesday:

Environmentally Friendly Cars:

What Do We Already Know?
Tesla is leading car company.
It is not run by petrol.
It is run by batteries.
It is clean.
Can be run by chocolate.
Does not release pollution.
Can be solar powered.
Made from recycled materials.

Our Questions About EFC:

Why Is This Important To Study?
- To help save the environment
- To protect the ozone layer.
- So that when we (Year 6) grow up, we can make wise choices.
-

What were some things we (humans) used to do that now would seem crazy?
- Burning plastic in the yard
- Crucify people
- Having an afro
- No blinkers, hands were used
- Put coal in train engines

When researching environmentally friendly cars type this into Google or Youtube:

environmentally friendly cars (for kids)

environment helping

pollution less cars

Tesla website

sustainable cars

clean cars

green cars

Homework for Mr Lima's group: Due in 12/10 (Wednesday)

a) Find a video about environmentally friendly cars. Watch it and write down 7 things you learnt from the video in your English books.

b) Find out where petrol comes from.

Term 3
Rubric for Brochure:
Your brochure must be handed in by Wednesday 3:00pm. It will be marked based on the following criteria:

Presentation -
Ensure your brochure is formatted correctly, it is presentable. Have you included subheadings, used rulers, made it look professional? Your pictures can be cut out from magazines or printed, however you will not necessarily gain or lose marks if you do not have a printer. We are looking for effort, therefore if you can draw a picture, make sure you colour it in.

Information:
Ensure you include information about your days, where you are going, how will you get there, will food be provided etc. We want to be able to learn about Antarctica, it wildlife and how we will enjoy ourselves. Also, persuade us to choose you.

Description:
This goes hand in hand with Information. Bring your brochure alive, include adjectives and language that will allow us to visualise how amazing the day will be.

Inclusions:
The best way to do this, is to have a look at what needs to be included in a brochure and do your best to include it. That doesn't mean you need to include everything but try your best to include information that you have learnt by studying brochures.

Grammar and Punctuation:
Edit, edit and edit again. Make sure that you have full stops in the correct location, capital letters, that your headings and subheadings are appropriate.

Adjectives to help us with our brochure
exotic, amazing, remarkable, majestic, magnificent, marvelous, fascinating, memorable, famous, sleek, stylish, famous, magical, incredible, unique, mouth watering, overwhelming, true wonder, spectacular, splendid, sparkling, beautiful, luxurious.

What should be included in a brochure:
- Days of travel
- Contact details (email, website, phone number)
- Images/photos
- Accommodation
- Testimonials (what people have said about the tour - it has to be positive in your brochure)
- Price based on the season
- The duration
- The activities you will be doing each day
- Transportation (how you will get around)
- When does the offer expire
- Map
- Where you are going
- Travel requirements (Visa, passport, vaccinations)
- Currency
- Laws
- Descriptions of the location
- Climate and temperature
- Icons
- Route
- Additional Costs
- Terms and conditions
- How many people can fit in the accommodation
- Logo

Possible things to do in Antarctica
- Visit Alladin's Cave
- Kayaking
- Trip to Mawson's Hut
- Explore Mount Erebus
- Wildlife Watching (penguins, leopord seals, etc)
- Helicopter Ride
- Ice fishing
- Hiking
- Sledding (with the dogs)
- Macquarie Island
- Tour around a lab
- Photography
- Camping
- Visit tombstone of those who have passed away
- Visit Glaciers

Brochure World

Get your brochure and read silently for 15 minutes. Pay close attention to how the pages are laid out. How much information is used? How much visuals/images are used? What are the headlines like?

Flick through and do the following:

1. Write your name on the front of your brochure.

2. Find an itinerary that interests you.

3. Using one coloured pen, highlight or underline 3-6 areas of the itinerary that interests you.

4. Using a different pen or highlighter, underline the days you will be travelling.

5. Circle the map.

6. Underline in a different pen adjectives that are used.

6. a) Circle in RED modes of transport throughout your trip.

7. Rate the picture in terms of 5 stars (5 stars being the best 1 star being the worst). You will rate the picture in terms of how interesting it is and if it makes you want to travel to the destination.

8. Put a square around what is "included" (inclusions) on the trip.

9. Put a little smiley face or a sad face next to the price. A smiley face if you think it is a good and fair price or a sad face if you think it is an expensive price.

10. Write down in a little bubble which continent it is on.

11. Find out what the cost of the tour is in US currency and in Euros.

12. Give your itinerary 3 "Likes" if you recommend people to go to it or "No Likes" if you don't recommend it. Maybe 2 likes if you think it's ok and one like if you don't really recommend it.

13. In your English book, write down what an itinerary or brochure of a location/trip should include.

Mr Lima's Group:

Helicopter Trip

Write a diary entry across one day whereby you are travelling by helicopter,landing on Antarctica, seeing animals and packing equipment. You will be staying on land overnight. Please watch the videos below with a partner and use headphones. Please set the volume to loud.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zhNm_yBR3bY (smaller video show all)

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UcIux22bLtY (larger, skip to crevasses and end part of ship)

Your Task: In your diary entry, you must include the following:

6-10 emotions that you feel over the two days (e.g. scared being a passenger on the helicopter)

3-5 facts about Antarctica

3-5 facts about an Antarctic animal

2-4 facts about helicopters (can be its colour, sound it makes, size etc)

3 - 6 pieces of vital equipment that you would need to take (this does not include clothes)

Travel Brochure

http://www.funkidslive.com/learn/penguin-explorers/make-travel-brochure/

For conclusion:
The conclusion of an information report gives any final details or facts about the topic. It may also be used to review what the report was about.

Think of it as Interesting Facts.

CLASSIFICATION Example

Adelies are a type of penguin that do not fly. They are also mammals and their scientific name is pygogcelis. They are fluffy due to the fact that they have a layer of protection. In addition, they live in coastal Antarctica and migrate during the winter.

An example of an “A” grade paragraph

Adelies and their Diets:

Adelie penguins have a small range of food that they eat, however their diet is being heavily impacted by humans. Adelies mainly eat krill and fish, hunting 3 times a week. The females do most of the hunting and they find their food close to where their nests are located. However, during winter, Adelies migrate thousands of kilometres in search of food. The problem lately has been that humans are overfishing which has meant that Adelies have less to eat. In fact, since 2005, there has been a reduction in Adelies due to less fish in the Antarctic according to Time magazine.

Writing:Antarctica

This week (week 4) you are going to research an animal that lives in Antarctica. You will be given a picture to use when publishing your information. Firstly you will research the animal you are given, the link below might help. You will write all the information about the animal in your English book, this must be edited and shown to your teacher. Publish your information report on paper and use the image in some way to link it to your information.

http://www.coolantarctica.com/Antarctica%20fact%20file/antarctica_animal.php

Persuasive Writing

Students get into pairs or threes and find 6-10 commercials they enjoy and watch them.

Then pick 5 of the best commercials and answer the following questions on a Google Doc per commercial:

Why did you like the commercial?

What made it persuasive? List the persuasive features.
What would you change about the commercial to make it better or more persuasive?

You Google Doc must include:

Answers to the questions above.
The link to the commercial

You need to then share it with Mr Lima: caetano.lima@syd.catholic.edu.au

**If we have time some groups will present to the whole class**

Show the image to students again and get them to swap with a partner again.

Write 3 things your partner has done well and an area they can improve.
Ensure spelling and punctuation is correct when they finish.
Mr Lima may ask you to share it back to the class.
You are expected to include 5-8 facts about Antarctica in their paragraph. They can use the knowledge they have gained so far or they are welcome to use a device for research.

Writing a Diary Entry

Write a diary entry about what you have done today. Remember how Sophie has written her diary entry. She has included facts, emotions, images and different fonts. Try and do the same. You may choose to include a picture or not. It is up to you.

You will be given 15 - 20 minutes to write and will be placed in pairs. After you hear the chime you will swap books, regardless of whether you are finished or not.

· 1st Chime: Check and edit for spelling, punctuation (capital letters, full stops, commas etc)

· 2nd Chime: Find three areas, words or sentences that can be improved (perhaps they don't make sense or it could be improved). You will need to circle these areas and discuss how they can be improved.

· Put an underline on three areas, words or sentences that you enjoyed and explain to your partner why you enjoyed it.

3rd Chime: Write another paragraph or sentence either at the end of their recount or include 2 sentences.

Early finishers: You will be expected to include an image

1. Using a venn diagram compare this to the blueprint of the Auroa Australis.

2. Write a paragraph stating the reasons why a cruise ship is so different to the ship used to go to Antarctica.

3. Answer the question: “What have you learnt about the way images convey information?”

Example of a Diary Entry

Getting Ready
Get with a partner you have never worked with before. Choose 2 questions from the website below and ask the other partner and let them have a go at answering while you record. Once you have both had a go, read the sample answer and then have a second go at it.
https://biginterview.com/blog/interview-questions-answers

Practise Makes Perfect

Warm Up: Tt explains a story about their interview experience.

T asks students to write down what they have learnt about the interview process so far.
Ss will do the lesson outside. All i pads are to be taken outside.
Explain to students that they need to go onto the blog on the writing page. Please do the same with them and run through the tasks with them:
TASK 1: Go to the following website in pairs. They must stay in the infants playground and find somewhere quiet for them to work in. Kane and Jeremy are not to work together. http://jobsearch.about.com/od/teenjobinterviews/qt/teeninterview.htm
Using the three questions you looked at from last lesson, have your partner record you and say your answer while trying to maintain eye contact with the camera to the best of your ability. Swap when you have finished saying your answers and allow your partner to do the same.
When you have both been “interviewed”, watch the recording back (use connectors) and then discuss how it could be improved. Write down 3-5 things you did well and 2 areas you could improve. Do the same thing for your partner.
Discuss how you could improve and then try doing a completely new question. Read through the sample answer and then relate it to McDonalds and then record it.
Come together with the teacher when there is about 10 minutes to go and discuss what was learnt.

Ss ask one another 5 of the questions found on the site above and record one another in relation to McDonalds. After they swap, they have a chance to ask about a profession of their own that they would like to get involved in. They write down what they have learnt.

Interviews:

https://www.themuse.com/advice/how-to-answer-the-31-most-common-interview-questions

On the link below pick 3 of the questions asked towards teens and then check out the sample answer. Go through the answers and then write down what you have learnt from the three answers.

http://jobsearch.about.com/od/teenjobinterviews/qt/teeninterview.htm

Where The Forest Meets The Sea

THESE LINKS GIVE MORE INFORMATION ABOUT THE DAINTREE

https://www.rainforestrescue.org.au/page/81/threats-to-daintree-lowland-rainforest

http://www.cairnsunlimited.com/save_the_daintree_rainforest.htm

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LjwbV0McXLI

1. Using an interactive whiteboard or individual computers, locate

The Daintree using Google Earth.

2. Find images of the Daintree using Google images.

3. Watch a you tube video of the Daintree.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1wU2kytIXhQ

4. Find another video which relates to saving the Daintree

10. Write down 5 ways the videos you have explored has tried to persuade the viewer. Then write 5 facts you have learnt about the Daintree.

Extension: Write a small letter to the Tourism Companies who are building on the land and try and convince them that they should stop. You must include 3 good reasons and elaborate on each.

5. Come to the floor as we will discuss what we have found.

6. On the floor we will discuss how the videos you found try and persuade the audience to.....

Enjoy Storybird, use the link below, then share your story with a friend

https://storybird.com/accounts/signup/

Searching For A Real Job

Ss are given the chance to finish their cover letter. The students who have finished their cover letter go onto seek.com.au website and with the teacher search through specific jobs. The T goes through a random job and answers the below questions with the Ss as a model.

Ss must find 3 very different jobs and must answer the following questions in your book.

One job must be a casual job, a part time job and a full time position.

What is the job?

Why did you choose this job?

What is the name of the company?

What skills are required?

How much experience is required?

How much is the salary (if any)?

What level of education is required?

Who do you need to get in touch with?

Rubric

Rubric:

Cover Letter:

Element 1: Paragraphs/content

P1: Interest in specific role and introduction of self

P2: A brief outline of the 3 reasons why individual is suitable for the job

P3: The 3 reasons with elaboration for each

P4: The experience you have and how it has helped the individual

P5: Conclusion

Element 2:

Linking words. That is, making the connection between skills or experience and how it would be helpful for them to land the job and be suitable for the role.

Element 3:

Punctuation and Grammar

Element 4:

Spelling

Element 5:

Persuasiveness

Element 6:

Professionalism.

Example of a good cover letter by a student below:

Persuasion

Good website to use and for templates: http://www.youthcentral.vic.gov.au/jobs-careers/applying-for-jobs/how-to-write-a-cover-letter

Example of a good and a bad cover letter.

http://www.seek.com.au/career-advice/cover-letters-the-good-and-the-
bad

Use these scaffolds to help you.

http://www.best-job-interview.com/cover-letter-template.html

http://www.youthcentral.vic.gov.au/jobs-careers/applying-for-jobs/cover-letter-work-experience .

Use the link below to get a template of the document below:

http://www.teenjobs.com.au/career-resource-articles/the-resume/35/cover-letter-template-.html

Cover Letter Template

Rique Rahme

12 Dell St

Bankstown, NSW, 2200

Tel: 0415 643 321

Email: rique.rahme001@gmail.com

2^nd May, 2016

Mr White

Directing Manager

Plumber to the Rescue

2 - 377 Kent Street

Sydney

Dear [name of contact]

In the first paragraph you should briefly explain who you are and why you are writing to them. Name the position you are applying for and where you saw the position advertised. While it’s fine to start this paragraph with ‘I’, try not to start every paragraph in the same way. Never forget to mention which job you’re applying for.

Explain why you think you are qualified for the position, emphasising how your previous experience (if applicable) and transferable skills make you ideal for the role. Mention your most important qualifications (for example ‘I have just completed the Higher School Certificate at St Andrews College’) and what you think you would bring to the company. If the job advertisement lists selection criteria, this is the place to say how your skills and experience meet the criteria they’re looking for. If a job has asked that you address selection criteria separately, this can go in a separate document.

In the third paragraph, explain why you would like to work for this particular company, showing that you have done research regarding the position. Companies want to know that you’re interested in them and understand what they do, and what they want from their employees. You may be applying for hundreds of different jobs but you need to make each prospective employer think that their job is the only one you want.

Lastly, politely request that they consider your application, conveying your appreciation for their time. Make sure you include, for example ‘if you require any further information, do not hesitate to contact me on 0414****** or smith@hotmail.com’. Being polite and enthusiastic will help to create an overall good impression.

Yours sincerely

Signature (not essential)

Print full name

Chapter 1 Parvana
After reading this chapter, pick one of subjects below and do the following:
- Write down 3 pieces of information about each one ?-
- Make a connection with your topic (e.g. I heard about the Taliban in the news)

The Taliban,
Restrictions and education of girls,
Clothing for women and girls in other countries
War
Poverty
Fleeing the country/refugee
Selling to survive
Destruction of Kabul

Comprehension: (write the question out)
1. What is the Father's job and why is Parvana able to help him go to work and stay with him while he works?
2. Who lives in Parvana's family, and what kind of housing do they have?
3. How had Kabul changed due to war?
4. How did the rule of the Taliban change the lives of Parvana's family?

Chapter 2 Parvana
Vocabulary
Write down the meaning of each word. Don't use a dictionary unless you really have to. Instead read it back to yourself in the sentence and try and make sense of it.

- Toshak
- Superior
- Burqa
- Intricate

Activity
Rule a line down your page, until half way, straight down the middle. On one side write similarities and on the other side write differences. List the similarities and differences between your own family life and Parvana’s family life. Then write in one sentence below this activity which answers, what is
the biggest difference.

Comprehension: (write the question out and answer in full sentences)
1. Why does Parvana have to go to get water for the family? Why does the water have to be boiled?
2. Why doesn't the family talk to the neighbors or invite friends over?
3. Why does the family sell their things? Why would they sell Parvana's good clothing?
4. Who was Hossain?
*5. What was Father's lesson in his story at night?
*6. Why do the four soldiers burst in the room and take Father away?

Video: (watch the video below and then write 3 facts that you learnt from watching it)

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rkh3WB5Htwg

A Break From Parvana
What makes a story deserve to get an A?

1. Read the story in silence to yourself.
2. Circle two sentences in red which you think had great detail and explain what you liked about it.
3. Circle 6 punctuation areas that were done correctly and explain two of them.
4. Find one error in punctuation and explain why it is wrong.
5. Write in your books the following answers:
a) Who was the main character in the story?
b) What was the problem in the story?
c) How was the problem solved?
6. What grade would you give this paper?
What are three things this author has done well and one area he/she could have improved.

Editing Your Own Writing

** Three things you have done well in your writing.

** Three ways you can improve your writing.

** 3 punctuation errors you have made

** 3 locations they have displayed correct grammar and punctuation.

** 2 locations they could have added more detail (they need to include the detail also).

You will need to write a small explanation for each one.

Character Growth Examples